smorgishborg

Blue Manhattan :D

The poem is nice, but I think you may have bitten off more then you can chew. I mean NY is such a fantastic topic, so many things to describe! ...

^ This deserved, I think, that bump of sorts. ^ I love this, it's the most well crafted piece of poetry I've yet to see on these forums. It's fantastic, ...

It's very nice, I'm excited to hear it! Only fault I can really find, is that there isn't a line the repeats enough to hold it together. Without a doubt, ...

*applause* I hope you don't mind if I link to it, some people don't appear to know what script it was... Flowers for the Wake

It was nice, definately ended better then it started, but overall there weren't any fatal errors. A couple things if you will: + I hate the name "Sparkston". Unless it ...

Love is Kind? by xhalcyonx128 I like this one quite a bit. But it didn't get the crits it deserved... As for my works, I'd love a crit on anything ...

You expressed a very generic sentiment in a very generic way. I didn't care for it. Approaching a very broad topic like this one, is something that should be done ...

All well and good I guess. This really isn't my favorite type of story, I'm not too into the whole ancient legends/magic/jewel thing. You had a lot to cover, but ...

Very interesting premise... Interesting indeed. I agree with Cade's comments on the dialouge. I'll add that I didn't like how certain characters acted to extraordinary events. e.g. + Alison doesn't ...

thething912, One of the most cruical things that if wrong with this play is your methodology. You seem to be trying to write a flawless draft every time. You say ...

I just deleted my entire crit. Oh well, I'm not that easily discouraged! This has too many mistakes for a basic description, so I've done a line by line in ...

I'm not laughing Kit! I liked it quite a bit. But since nobody here seems interesting in giving this the review it deserves, I felt I'd have to try. Make ...

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As poetry, it is nothing special. It lacks the imagery, or the depth that a great poem contains. I see life for this, but more as a song then a ...