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Heh. I get the impulse to write a story completely for yourself, a notion which I 100% support, but once you've made the decision to show it to the public ...

Just wanted to stop by and make some quick notes. - It's always tricky, trying to figure out where to stop and where to go (in terms of posting chapters). ...

Don't feel discouraged! It's a tricky thing, to streamline and edit and rewrite a work, and trickier still to get it to a level where it radiates perfection. (I certainly ...

You are most definitely right, the hooker line is silly and the woodenly was unnecessary. (I knew someone was going to point out that hooker line before I fixed it ...

Hey. Sorry it took awhile to get back to you, but here goes: I don't/can't buy that she "kills" him in any way. For a few reasons: (1) The light ...

...and I'm probably going to change the title. Just not sure what it'll be, yet.

Sorry it took me so long to respond. I've been out of town for most of the past two weeks. Conrad Rice >> Thanks, first of all, for the nice ...

Eee, thanks so much! Your lovely lovely words are muchly appreciated. Imp >> I got my mark today. 100%, so I think it was well-received. :D Thanks for the feedback! ...

Thanks, all of you. :)

Heheh, okay. Also: I've majorly revamped some of the phrasing in the story (not really "majorly revamped," but it feels like that at five o'clock in the morning). Also bumped ...

I liked this. I found well scanning through pieces, so if your piece has already been graded let us know. I did notice you seemed to go in reverse. Even ...

bubblewrapped >> Yay, you liked it! :) Snoink >> Heh, this isn't the Red Riding Hood story. That one lies on my hard drive awaiting a major editorial overhaul, or ...

You guys are lovely. Thanks for the feedback. Hehehe... I didn't say that you wouldn't have to change anything else. I just sounded what sounded better in that one sentence. ...

I think this one sentence could be better so instead of this: And so the queen touched their faces, and they fell to their knees and wept. This: And so ...

Okay, I expanded a bit on the transition from Elanna: normal to queen: crazy person, so hopefully it works better. What do you think? And thanks for the feedback, guys. ...