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Is the turning of the tree a metaphor for that he has done somethig great, or has ge litterally tirned into a tree? Other than that, good one! :smt003

The Old Universe collapsed. This wasn't taken well at all by the two contractors who built it."Oh come on! It had another two million years on the clock!", shouted Gravity, ...

More! MORE!! 8)

What an emotional rollercoaster! I really felt like bursting into tears at the end! Good job! :cry:

That is one disturbing story you've got there! Very well written, I say! :thud:

Wow. You are writing in a very difficult person and you have atchieved it really well! But who is the face in the mirror? Are you going to continue with ...

Well, you now those massive Camper Bags? That's what I meant. About the gun, in the origonal it was going to be a paper knife, but I changed it into ...

You have an amazing way with words! I was feeling real sympathy for the main character and hatred of her tormentors, especially Blaine

I think that this a good introduction to a story that can be developed

Thanks for the comment! I was so worried that people might find the begining cliche but now I think that people might actually enjoy the story.

As I walked along the road that night, a particularly dark night as I remember, I came across no one, "Good", I thought to myself, as I changed the position ...

If this is the first chapter, I would like to read the rest of the story!

I think you've got a good concept from what I can see. The overall structure of this piece is interesting as well. Are you going to continue this story or ...

I am liking the description in this story. I hope that the next chapter will have as much in it because I think that you have the right amount in ...