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Re: Untitled
here's a review on just grammer bolded and the in italics is the correction But since those glorious years, all is changed. A poverty but little above the level of ...
Sep 13, 2009 -
Re: mage of dragons chapter two part d
here's part d of arolands leper Cicerin fitted a golden fletched arrow to his Triddian yew bow. He released, sending the arrow flying through the air whistling. Its mark was ...
Sep 12, 2009 -
Re: Wrath of a Grecian Moon (3)
very good i thought here's a quick sum up of what i think you used very good description the characters are well defined, even if they are based off of ...
Sep 12, 2009 -
Re: part c of the mage of dragons
here is part c enjoy and please crit I wonder where tose Bandits be off to. Bad idea it was to camp next to ta road. Oagle fondled the runic ...
Sep 5, 2009 -
Re: chapter two (part b)
heres part of chapter two enjoy and please criticize Chapter Two: Aroland’s Leper Year Four-Hundred Twilight loomed over the once azure sky, slowly covering the sky in a yellow black ...
Aug 2, 2009 -
Re: Currently untitled- please review!
heres a short review for the beggining you said that he was unconscious. how can he still have a bloody wound if he was unconscious. you should write how long ...
Jul 30, 2009 -
Re: No One Knows
ya i have to agree with sister nebraska. you don't want to have redundancy, it can make a story become boring when you use one word too many times. you ...
Jul 30, 2009 -
Re: The End of Time Chapter Five (Part B)
hi fairly good story i thought you described the characters well if you ask me the name Jyuna became a little irksome to kep trying to pronounce in my head. ...
Jul 30, 2009 -
Re: Dreams of Giants
hey very well written if you ask me. i didnt really find anything wrong with it except: Only the best story tellers can give their story a life of its ...
Jul 30, 2009 -
Re: Chapter 1 ....of a unnamed story x_x
this sentence is a wee bit wierd Elves love to say I’m a very beautiful elf I’m tall and slender with very fair skin, and very long black hair add ...
Jul 29, 2009 -
Re: mage of dragons
heres part of chapter two enjoy and please write a review, but not about grammer and spelling thanks Chapter Two: Aroland’s Leper The fall of Járl Year three-hundred and ninety-nine ...
Jul 29, 2009 -
Re: How are YOU doing in school
i get as in pretty much everything, except science :x
Jul 29, 2009 -
Re: my monologue
i think that it is pretty good but then again it could just be me
Jul 29, 2009 -
Re: Myopia
heres the answers to your many queries Has your number increased since first being prescribed these lenses? yes Have you been able to naturally cure your number? nope Do you ...
Jul 29, 2009 -
Re: I Need HELP!!
what about the name susan hall :?: :?: :?:
Jul 29, 2009
