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Hi! I really like this; the references to blood are moving for me. I have two suggestions/questions as well.... 1. "The winds are their murderers, the water their minion." I ...

Hi! I really like this; the references to blood are moving for me. I have two suggestions/questions as well.... 1. The winds are their murderers, the water their minion. I ...

A circle gos on forever just like the love you share. Just by saying hi you can brighten someones day so share all the love you can bare. This is ...

Thank you so much for all of your suggestions! 1. You have a major problem with punctuation. Put a period somewhere or a comma if it's needed. I totally agree! ...

The Lemon-Yellow Sun A sip of tangy-sweetness. Cold golden delight With a crisp scent that makes you Feel the sticky black asphalt, Melting under the gingham Table cloth. Surrounded by ...

Thanks for the advice! I just wrote this yesterday and was really happy with the first two stanzas, but I was unsure what to do with the last ones. I ...

Whoa! This poem is really interesting.... It was a little confusing the first time I read it, but now that I've reread it, I like it. It's short & sweet ...

Here is my poem after some editing. I changed quite a bit, but I'm unsure about the flow of the fourth stanza compared to the rest of the stanzas. Please ...

I'm having a really hard time understanding the meaning of this poem. I think that it's well written but there isn't a clear answer (or any answer for that matter) ...

This poem was sort of like a part of an essay you might write about yourself. Or, like mizz-iceberg said, it was very similar to something I could read in ...