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Re: A Girl Can Dream
I'm not sure what's up with this Balloon obsession of mine. More specifically yellow ones.
Feb 2, 2010 -
Re: My Intrest In Writing (needs help on conclusion!)
Even as a small child, I have had a passion for storytelling. From the orthodox array of fictitious companions that any only child creates for company, to pages upon pages ...
Jan 15, 2010 -
Re: The Beginning of an End
It had been about twenty minutes, and their eyes had not yet parted. A group of the Smallers had gathered around the doorframe in curiosity, little murmurs and questions rippling ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: Your Most Faithful Friend
Wipe your eyes, rid the tears. Blow your nose, clutch me and throw your sorrow into my hand. It's okay, go on just cry, It's what I do, it's who ...
Jan 10, 2010 -
Re: A Night of Stars
Garrett Rogers is probably the most amazing person I have ever met. Ever. I can’t remember a single time we were together that I wasn’t smiley or happy as can ...
Jan 10, 2010 -
Re: Jessica and Mimi
Smokey Charcoal yarn snaked it’s way around and up china doll legs, and the deep, screaming fear was set frozen in the back of the young girl’s mind. However terrifying ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: Hear the Doldrums
Running pale little fingers through flaming red hair, it made his day knowing she was there. Clutching his shoulders, those cocoa eyes sigh. They’re posing for pictures, wasting perfect time. ...
Dec 30, 2009 -
Re: Dance with the Devil
Hey, very well done, I have to say. But it seemed more like a story you were too lazy to write, therefore made into a poem. As for your opening ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: A Moment In Time
Worrying about the ‘should haves’ and ‘ifs’ is like saying please. I really liked this line. In a way it summarized the entire piece, and can make the reader's train ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Lose Yourself
Turn up the music, Lose yourself in the sound. Taste the acoustic strings Vibrating through the air, Let your heartbeat fall into turn with the steady bass. Breathe in the ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Make You Smile
Her soft, petite hand wraps it’s fragile fingers around mind, and for a few split seconds I simply could not breathe. Sparks like the lights in the trees surrounding clutter ...
Dec 19, 2009 -
Re: Walchestor ((AHEM. wrote out of boredom. sucks majorly))
If you look over the balcony of the Walchestor Mall in this small town that no one has ever heard of, and look down at the far right corner in ...
Dec 5, 2009 -
Re: Oh-So Stellar
Hey there Sunshine, Looks like its a pretty cloudy day. How's the rain been fallin'? Seems like quite a puddle has been made. Just open up those ultramarine eyes, Make ...
Dec 4, 2009 -
Re: Delilah, As Told in Lavender ((VERY rough draft))
I met Marie Edwards on a bright Tuesday when I was eight years old.August twelfth, if you really want to know. She had moved into the neighborhood about a month ...
Dec 2, 2009 -
Re: Secrets
Repetition at the beginning of the line is good, and helps the flow and pattern of a poem, but over-using it makes you sound like you can't use your creativity ...
Nov 29, 2009
