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You get an authentic, working cannon! Alas, you have no cannonballs, so your cannon is useless due to your sad, sad lack of ammunition. *inserts coin*

Oh. My. Gosh. THANK GOODNESS IT'S NOT JUST ME!!! :'D I read a lot, so I know some words that don't come up in everyday conversation, which means I've never ...

'and I look over to where that spot Mom used to be at every day after school' should be something like, 'to where Mom used to be every day after ...

'pushing it over with its draws' drawers 'large silver buildings stretched onto their toes to catch their own bit of sun.' I understand that you're speaking figuratively, but how are ...

NOT THE EVIL UNICORNS?! O.O I thought I'd lost them for good that time when I faked my own death in New Zealand... I had hoped they'd never find me... ...

Some punctuation errors - proofreading =

Well, lets see... Ah! Yesterday was my 16th birthday. Woot! ^^ And even though my brothers both got balloons and a paper sign by their door on their birthdays, and ...

'Its bright yellow exterior glowing brightly against the dreary town'. First, this is not a sentence. It can't stand on its own. It needs to be fused with the sentence ...

@ Dreamy: Yeah, I like Harry Potter. ^^ The first ones more than the last few... I think Goblet of Fire was my favorite, and then I didn't like the ...

Use them to decorate a pen! Or the hilt of a knife! XD A tinfoil one, of course... ;)

Couple punctuation mistakes... 'After the chalice was filled, the woman partake of the liquid' Partook. The group fell to the ground, and then they began to flee? How? Did they ...

Without counting weekends? o.o I envy your summer vacation... T-T I lived in a state where school never started until after labor day - in September. Then last year I ...

'The forest that was teeming with animals, tall trees and green plants' Was once teeming. Hmm... Just wondering. Is it considered 'smart' to drink dirty-looking water from a stream on ...

This is good! Intriguing... I'd like to see more. :) I didn't notice a whole lot of errors, and the way your characters speak is very natural. 'It happened. Really' ...

A few spelling/punctuation errors. 'Out of anger' Wait, why is she angry? She may be embarrassed, ashamed, worried, mortified... But what/who is she angry at? 'My book bag was yanked ...