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This is an interesting start... I'll give my overall opinion at the end. My thoughts as I went through: Some punctuation and spelling errors. Some of those lines in your ...

For a first draft, this really isn't bad. :) You have a good start, I think, and I'm interested in knowing more about these dreams of his, why he can ...

This isn't bad. ^^ I kind of like it, though there are a few areas that may need a little work... Nitpicks: "probably the worst thing to happen to one’s ...

I sat in the field, baring my face toward the heavens as I watched the stars die. It was a warm summer night. The grass tickled my palms and the ...

Very nice. ^^ Amusing, with just a hint of dark seriosity (I'm writing the review, so I can make up words. ;)). "The patient shrugged, suddenly losing interest as he ...

This was amusing. XD Very entertaining. Just a few things I wasn't entirely pleased with... My notes as I went through: “All hinns arrn't tat hart,” my words were mumbled. ...

I like this. ^^ You did a good job adding at least a little seriousness into your rather random topic. XD Some specific things: "The way she twinkled her eyes, ...

Related Poem(ey, er, thing) based on this: “Your story is about a nurse trapped in a black hole, forgetting names.” Floating. Fast and Aimless. Conserving. Scraping up all the short ...

“Your story is about a nurse trapped in a black hole, forgetting names.” Link to Related Poem-ey Thing: She floated. Their ship drifting, with no determinable goal... No, drifting wasn’t ...

Once your arm falls off, it’s not hard to figure out that the day is going to go way downhill. And I don’t mean, “Oh, my arm’s so tired, it ...

As usual, my queen ran away the moment she saw my carriage rumble through the palace gates. This time she made it all the way to the stables, evading her ...

'It's about a girl training to be a dragon gladiator, and its her first time in the arena.' Yes, this is just on YWS, but... May I suggest you let ...

I love multiple POVs, as long as it's done WELL. I like to get into different characters heads... And in my own writing, there are some scenes that HAVE to ...

Thanks. :) And yeah, I would like to 'futz' with it a little more, as you put it. XD And I'm not entirely happy with the ending myself. If I ...

A pleasant little story written for a challenge-ey thing on the topic "Vacation." ^^ ~ As usual, my queen ran away the moment she saw my carriage rumble through the ...