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First of all, I love how you don't consider your friends and family to be actual people. XD This has some potential, but... My thoughts going through: "The only sound ...

Not bad... My thoughts going through: "Fog blanketed the ground, concealing the advancing army." If they're concealed, how does she know they're there? Does she just know ahead of time ...

"... when Whitley says..." How much does the MC respect this headmistress? If she has a lot of respect, she'll probably keep the title of Headmistress there all the time, ...

An interesting story... My thoughts going through: "All I found was his fishing rod, with a squid still trying to escape." If that was all he found, how did he ...

A good start. :) My thoughts going through: In the first paragraph, you've got a lot of metaphors and imagery all in one space. Seeping pain, novas in her head, ...

I think your beginning needs a little work... Your intro isn't very strong. At least not to me. I, for one, think that her husband killing her is more tragic ...

Interesting. :) "peaking at the metallic object" -- Peeking. "nerdy machine from an old science fiction movie" I'm picturing a machine with nerdy glasses and suspenders being given a wedgie... ...

Not a bad fairy-tale, but I did have some issues with it. Specifically, with the characters... My thoughts going through: "...extravagantly rich to the horribly poor. Though the King knew ...

Very interesting, and beautifully written. My thoughts going through: "feel the night sky's many-eyed gaze on my back" -- Excellent way to talk about the stars... "Cannot it be cold ...

Kamas. That thing is going to have me LOL-ing for the next eighty-seven years. When I am old and grey and forget how to use a spoon properly, I am ...

I liked this. ^^ I think you did a good job, really getting us into the main character's head. There are just a couple things that I think could be ...

An edited (and really long, XD) version of this story can be found here: For those of you who don't know what a wyvern is... To my understanding, it's got ...

There is one very good reason to watch the video. So you can understand all the inside jokes, and parodies, etc. that will show up over the years! Someday, it's ...

Okay, so I wrote this as a challenge for the writers' group I'm in with my mom and a bunch of very nice old people. We were supposed to find ...

@ Kitten: No, I'm pretty sure it's pasttime. Considering the mission statement is posted from YWS itself... You can write to pass time, but things like baseball (and in this ...