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Ah, so, I think this is considered a bug. Maybe. On the 'Teams' link off the homepage, where you can see the top reviewers for every team and how many ...

"I awoke to the steady beat of pacing footsteps. My eyes fluttered open to find that it was a fifteen or sixteen year old boy with dark brown, curly hair ...

"I hate having to leave its dirty streets," Most people would want to leave dirty streets, so I would maybe add a little something to this, about why he loves ...

"Only a few pieces of the violet pieces remained" Pieces pieces. Repetition. Maybe say 'a few pieces of the violet set', instead? "Alexis commenced to advance towards the gates of ...

"They sat on the floor, backs leaned against the wall." The second part of this sounds a little odd. There are a number of ways you could fix it though, ...

"Everything around me was going chaotic." This is kind of a passive way to say it, and I'm not sure passive is generally good for a first line. I'd like ...

"One day (it would be improper to say "one sunny day" in the manner of most story beginnings, as almost every day bathed the city in a dim orange glow ...

" “You always were stubborn, weren’t you, Lilly?” He doesn’t look angry or confused by the fake name. More amused than anything. Amused at what I’ve had to do to ...

""She has been dead for a month now." said I defending my point, "You loved her and you're obsessed with her even after she's gone and that's the cause of ...

"The howling of vicious barks, screeching of sirens, and roaring of motors" Howling of vicious barks sounds odd to me... I would change this line to either 'The howling dogs, ...

"Memories of that place as distant as the broken pieces of a morning dream." This line made me smile. :) Excellent way of capturing that feeling of waking up... I ...

" I realized I was lying on a bed. I felt like I was in my home, lying on my own bed, waking up from any other night. However, as ...

I'll confess to having clicked the back button now and again. But usually I'll keep reading a piece to the end once I start critiquing, giving the best review that ...

I personally, would love to be your 100th review, because Ribbit is awesome. :) I have one of my newest fantasy short stories here: And I was hoping to get ...

For those of you who don't know what a wyvern is... To my understanding, it's got the head of a dragon, body of a snake, and wings... Apparently they often ...