shanan-cat

Well, this is definitely and interesting story line... very original and appealing. You picked a some wicked words and had a excellent idea to how you were going to end, ...

Every time I gazed into your eyes, I melted. Jolts rushed through out my body. The glimmer on your eyes was ecstatic. I felt like I could reach out, settle ...

I know this sounds really, really emo at the beginning, but bear with me. It gets better. I want the world to go away. The bustling cities, The quiet woodlands, ...

That was so good. The way you made all your words rhyme was easy going and beautiful. It felt as the words melted in my mouth while I read it ...

[ x] The alluring moon stared me down through two pine trees, daring to darken my features. The glimmer off the water droplets that hung to the long blades of ...

Truly amazing work there, Medusa! Keep it up, and just a little note, add more detail! :smt016 Have fun writing, Shanan-cat! :elephant:

Forever and ever I can feel you fire touched tongue licking, grasping for air stealing away at everything that I gave you... you can never hear what my heart whispers ...

That was truly amazing , my friend! Good work!

Okay... That was good, very good! It had good flow to it, I just thought that there were a few things that you need too change-- and that's under my ...

Haven't heard of you in a long time, girlfriend! So, onto the review! If I need to fight I will fight and you can’t stop me. This is how it ...

Thanks people! So, do you really like it? Is it too grotesque?

"Death is my main meal, but your juicy blood is my great dessert. Your lifeless liver lays solemnly in a bowl, waiting to be topped by your cold blood and ...

Still you edited it, and still you keep it sounding the same: jumbled and all. It still think that it could use some more work, and with that, you could ...

Please, for all people posting things, noy only in this forum, but please, please capitilize ALL your sentences at the berginnings. That goes the same for your "i"s too. Just ...

I'm really sorry to tell you this, but... um... it's not very good. Your poem doesn't have very good flow, and it didn't reallt catch too much of my attention. ...