shanan-cat

Greetings. Just to start off, I thought this poem was interesting, but a little bland. I couldn't quite myself around the simple words that you used to describe your feelings. ...

The alluring moon stared me down through the breaks in the tall trees. You could smell the fresh rain that clung to the sprouting grass and the dandelions that littered ...

Oh, very unique! :D Although, very different.... I think that most people understand that when reading a poem, you count the syllables in your head. I thinks it's actually a ...

I'm sorry, but do you have an obssesion with the letter "I"? The first thing that I noticed wasn't what you wrote or any of the words that you had ...

This was AMAZING! I loved the way that you made those few words bold at certain times, but in the future, try to refrain from doing that. It takes the ...

Hey, I do what I can to help. :D

Thanks guys for the comments. Is there anything that you think I could improve? Do I nees more detail? Should I make it longer?

Your sweet red lips in the candle light, My deep, deep hunger I can no longer fight. Those deep blue seas that wash away the waves, A far, white moon ...

Welcome! I know I'm not really ready to this welcoming thing, but I felt like you need it and I liked that short piece that you had there. I really ...

Very nicely done. I loved reading it and I thought it was great. The only problem that I had with it was here: Dark as black midnight. Bright as morning ...

Sometimes I feel like I'm always left out, Sometimes I feel like a miss out, Some times I feel like I’m the odd one out, dom"] Alright. This poem is ...

I really like this piece, but I think that there are a few things that you could change. Not big things, but snall things that make the difference between "Like" ...

Sorry it's been so long since I've been on, I only have time to do so many things. Thanks a lot for th reviews, everyone! This piece I wrote in ...

Thanks a lot guys. I will definitely take all your advice and alter the layout, punctuation and flow of the poem, but just to let you all know, I did ...

I wish you could find something better to talk about than love. Love found. Love lost. Love taken. Love given. Love forbidden. Love ignored. I am tired of "love" as ...