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I'm sorry I hurt you, But I don't regret it. I feel like a fool, But know I'm just torn; I feel like I've broken Wordless oaths sworn To myself, ...

I like it, but you should punctuate appropriately for better fluency.

That is a really beautiful poem. You wrote it really well. I liked the theme of how eagerness can destroy caution, and destroy the goal.

Chapter One (6 days earlier) King Orlin rode his horse quickly through the Pass of Shades in the Moore Mountains. He used a less often traveled path and needed to ...

I agree that Gates of Dawn has the potential to be a really strong poem. I think it would be strengthened if you gave greater depth to your words, instead ...

I like the rhythm a lot, except the last line seems a little out of place because it's so long. Maybe you meant it that way, to make it stand ...

Awesome poem! I especially like the 3rd and 4th lines of each stanza.

Adrianna, though only an Initiate at the Mages’ Circle, realized she was near the fight for her life. Her opponent stood halfway across the cave, obscured by a burning field ...

So all the punctuation was already said. In addition, I don't find the rhythm to be very fluent. It jerks around a lot. Don't give up though. Your message is ...

Wow. That really strikes something in me. Good job. And I don't think it's necessary to add an 'A' before folded. The lack thereof makes it stand out, but I ...

Although Brad's comment was funny (and I'll have to remember it for use at some point in my life) I have to disagree with him. Simplest thought for a seemingly ...

Everyone else has already commented on the mechanics, so I'm going to totally ignore that and say just what I feel from the words themselves, though in retyping I might ...

Beautiful flower, Glowing with life, Pulsing with joy; Struck by an icy wind, The flower withers and dies. Killed by winter's frost, Only battered seed remains. Life, living solely due ...

I write this poem from my heart With which I've learned to never depart I write this poem of my heart With whom I hope to never part Where once ...

French isn't my first language and I'm still learning it, but I'm pretty sure I'm right in the following: --In line one with "vife" I think you wanted "vif" but ...