shadowstorm

Ooh I hadn't thought to go to our library. They might actually know some publications themselves. Thank you!

Thank you!

I just finished writing and editing a short suspense story, about 1,000 words, but I don't know where to submit it. I tried googling for some suspense magazines and all ...

A lurching heartbeat Throb, the sweet memories, Sweet grass flying through the air Like green dandilion seeds And lighting in our hair. Fire and water Matches, zippo, sticks By the ...

I posted my revised version recently, so if you want to check it out it's there.

Little girl, you've wandered so far... Lost the light of your guiding star, Blinded by darkness, tearing your eyes. Nobody hears your desperate cries As you stumble into the night. ...

Thank you so much for all your help guys. I'm working on a longer hopefully better version right now that I'll probably post sometime this week.

To add on to what charliebo said about the last stanza, i think it's because in the first three you have an "article + noun + verb" thing going on ...

The first two stanzas may be slightly cliche, but I like them. And as you've now read many times, the last stanza is amazing. As for the middle four, they ...

Little girl you've wandered so far... Lost the light of your guiding star, Found the light of another star-- A morning star-- Too bad it's not in the sky And ...

Absolutely beautiful! I love your word choice, and good job on using punctuation. I think a general rule in poetry is capitalizing the beginning of each line, but don't hold ...

I agree with Gadi that this poem has great potential, but I do not think as many things should be changed. I would add more punctuation and work on word ...

I dream a dream where dreams have dreams And dreamers never die-- Where suns and moons and nights and noons All share the same deep sky; Where fish can walk ...

Deep within me lives a demon Seen within my shallow face; Waiting for my guard to drop she surges forth, steals a base. Deadly to say the least, Painful to ...

When moon shines bright And stars are bright And all seems right, Even then there is wrong. The birds sing songs And life is full of songs And the heart ...