shadepelt

i really love this poem, it very well may be the best piece of poetry I have ever read! It is sweet and fun. I read on your profile that ...

I think it is a very great poem, trying to forget the ghosts of the pasts... sort of what I try to do. I also like the mystery... all together ...

Thanks for all your help. Hopeful_Youth, I describe where the train is taking her later in the story, which I edited and added to. Here is the revised beginning. Stupid ...

Thanks for your comments! i am really glad that some people think I can write! sorry about the character description, I put that in the beginning because when I first ...

it;s really great. the description was pretty god, but I wish you gave us more time to learn about the characters. It is very interesting, and i liked the whole ...

Okay, revised, edited, and added to. Stupid risks make life worth living. - Homer Simpson Prologue: Pain, fear, loneliness, separation, sadness, despair. Too many emotions piled up in one person. ...

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“Se turned back to her game of solitaire and moved the eight of spades under the nine of diamonds and flipped the unexposed card.” It should be she. “Looking around, ...

First of all, I love your story. It has a very interesting storyline, and I love your creativity! Some points: “She dropped her bike to the sidewalk as she pulled ...

That was great! It ended perfectly, I really liked it, even though it was dark, and there was so little description, it made it like a ton. as someone said ...

Yeah, like the person above, I think the imaginary friend/realm thing is super cool. It was sort of depressing how Alex died, but I really liked it. The only things ...

REVISED AND EDITED as of June 12th, 2011-Thank you to all reviewers who helped edit my earlier draft. Brief Summary: This is chapter one of a story I’ve been working ...