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Re: See you soon.
Run through once, look through twice, Keep both your eyes policing. Take your hands into a cloud, make them look like their missing. Wrap your shame in its mask, its ...
Apr 12, 2007 -
Re: Global Warming
Personally, I don't think it should take a massive striking fear of "Armageddon will come sooner if you don't conserve energy!" to make people do that, everyone should so it ...
Apr 10, 2007 -
Re: Human Eventuality
Glad to help :) Oh, and I did put it in paragraphs, but for some reason the indents disappeared.
Apr 9, 2007 -
Re: Lost
He's just as lost as you are, Trapped in the world, an endless maze. Everything around is like a blurry haze, People without faces, people without change. They all try ...
Mar 25, 2007 -
Re: Human Eventuality
If I were to tell you that a crazed, armed killer cloaked in black would be walking down the same street as you are within the next 5 minutes, then ...
Mar 25, 2007 -
Re: Butterfly's Dream
The first four lines were okay; they described well and had a good feeling. However, I really would've liked it more if it was longer, because you just suddenly end ...
Feb 25, 2007 -
Re: Teenager
As a fellow teenager, its like my life in poetry :P But, as a critic, I would have to say that it could have gotten more work. Some of the ...
Feb 22, 2007 -
Re: The Gray Reign
I loved the way you described the environment, the setting of a war because it really captures that feeling. However, it could have been a tiny bit longer when describing ...
Feb 22, 2007 -
Re: Corrupt a Wish
Granted, but you develop amnesia the next day. I wish that I had another bulb for my ceiling light.
Feb 22, 2007 -
Re: Make Up The Worst Possible Opening Line Ever
Here's my (3) lines. That was it, the end! Actually, not. The shortest book in history will certainly not be this one. A bit random, but hey. That was pretty ...
Feb 21, 2007 -
Re: Sandman
I consider this my 'first' poem, I have done some other ones but they were for practice and none were really finished. Critique! __________________________________ To lie in endless wait, I ...
Feb 21, 2007 -
Re: tell me about you
For me, I would like to study psychology because other people's thoughts and feelings are so interesting, but I dont know if I want to be a therapist, maybe a ...
Feb 16, 2007 -
Re: Greetings.
Hello there. Im Ralph and I am here to better my writing skills, because I've only been writing for about...a year or so. Short poems, descriptive essays and right now ...
Feb 16, 2007
