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Hey here is part three to The Anarchy. I made some changes to the other parts so you might have to re read them. I hope you enjoy. Please comment! ...

oohhh bone chilling...I like it :) I really appreciate the detail you put in here! Don't hesitate to add more! Descibe your vampire friend a bit more...and your main character. ...

I have to say I was very impressed with this story. It is was one of the only ones that I've read until the very end. Starting with the protagonist's ...

I believe that your story here is at a little bit of a standstill. I like how you are describing your main character a little bit more and the visions ...

I did some editing to my story. I'm not sure about the spelling of secrete but I'm going to leave it the way it is for now because according to ...

This is the second part to The Anarchy that you will have to read first in order to get this part. Rina walked home since the bus wasn't operational that ...

Very beautiful, and I think you mean it too :)

I definately find this VERY intriging! You have my full attention. Please keep writing this!

Would stares down on me like a cold wind of maybe, the excuses the lies, they all live to shame me. Should turns her face away when opportunity calls, raw ...

I wrote this a long time ago...the first paragraph is kinda confusing but the rest of it is better....hope everyone enjoys!

Pretty interesting! You have my attention...continue writing this! Develop your characters a little more and we might have a winner :)

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