serenephantom

I want to start by saying that these types of stories are my guilty pleasure. There is nothing I love more than reading stories with broken characters, (example: Oliver Twist). ...

I beginning this story completely lost. What is going on? Is the date a letter or telegram or just a chapter name. I don't understand it. I come in as ...

Ok I am one of the people who prefer to review flow and story line, but even I see you have a lot of grammar issues. Well i am not ...

Right of the bat i become confused. I get how you are explaining the works but what are they working on or at? Earlham College will be home to at ...

I am most defiantly keeping up with this story. I am already falling in love with in. You instantly draw the reader in with kith and soon enough a bond ...

I love the way you write. The rhythmic beat of the page seems to fall perfectly with in your words. I am instantly attracted to your story line but i ...

This is very interesting, I am drawn in with the magic and how easy it is but I become confused when you begin describing Jake. I feel as if you ...

I love this. I am fascinated by the mental mind and this draws directly into my mind. I would, if i could make a sugestion, you may want to add ...