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Hey everybody :) I'm not quite sure why I never once replied to the comments on this, so I thought I'd do some catching up and reply now. I find ...

The vibrations went out into the world around him, touching every ladybug, every tree leaf, every railroad track, every ray of sunlight with music. *squee* Beautiful. Does it really work ...

Hey again, I see you've changed things :P Here to review :) The diamond necklace was like broken glass in her hands, exuding some harsh innate gleam. Once it had ...

Hey, thanks for the review (again), Kiwi! :D From the looks of things you've had quite a lot of in depth feedback on this. lol yes. Extensive feedback. All of ...

Wow - massive thanks to both of you for taking the time out not only to read but properly review. There's stories that demand help because they are so broken, ...

Quick post: This is what the beginning was like before I changed it to dialogue. Should I change it back to this? It was before dawn, when the grass was ...

I go very in depth and I can spend paragraphs dissecting a single sentence. Yes *laughs* you do :) Thank you so much for the review! It's what I needed, ...

I actually changed the story already, Rach :P I've even uploaded the map I drew of the continent. But I'll address all your points anyway :P I think it's important ...

EDIT: So, I have now extended the beginning to show you the whole Prologue :D EDIT EDIT : Have added the map as well. Thank you to everyone who has ...

EDIT: CHANGED THE STORY! YAY! Thanks to everyone who's helped me turn this extremely undeveloped beginning to what it is now. --------------- Rachael: Gah, so sorry it took so long ...

Hey Rachael - this was a fantastically speedy reply on your half; you're a critique daemon :P Your bribe/threat was so intriguing I came right over and read. lol, I ...

Hey again Firestarter, sorry for the late reply - was busy with physics homework. I get that, but right now it feels a bit like an extended info dump. Without ...

brassnbridle: You could replace the archers with crossbowmen if you feel like it, just know that, while crossbows are easier to learn, they have a significantly shorter range than one ...

Kiwisatsuma: Well, you could have someone who dies in the battle. But I see what you mean about wanting to avoid bias and the only way I can think of ...

I think this might work better if you had a colon instead of a semi-colon, because 'the effective meat shield' sort of sums up what you're describing in the first ...