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Hey! 1) This story is really interesting, and I definitely recommend continuing it. 2) Unlike Dreami, I don't think this is too info-dumpy at all - Peter F. Hamilton has ...

Hey! Below are my corrections - not too many seeing as starynight89 seems to have summed it all up :) ------------------------------ Stupid questions(chap1) I was at Cameron’s house getting myself ...

This was a surprisingly good story! The interaction between the "hobo" and the future Gwen was very realistic and fun to read. canislupis, is right, however on her point that ...

Hey! Nice story - I only notice a few mistakes that no-one else had pointed out. ..... I settled myself into a corner and watched --------- I think you missed ...

Hi. 1) Welcome to YWS! 2) Poems like this would be better accepted at - this is more of a VERY literate writing site. 3) Below are mistakes I picked ...

Hey! First of all, the second revision is MUCH MUCH MUCH better than the first! ^^ 2) My first critique was a bit harsh - sorry for that ^^" 3) ...

Hi there! Below are my suggestions! :) ---------------- David Cain strolled the wet, dirt en-grained ------- "ingrained" ------ streets of the Slums with a new sense of feeling. What with ...

Not quite sure why you put this in. . . . ^^" I mean, it makes no sense. . . Anyways, you made a few mistakes ^^ below: "Cold.../Warn ------------ ...

** I'm glad that seemed to help you guys some! ^^ ** -------------------------

Username: 80% ----- as in the chick from Eragon? Custom Title: 60% ----- it's kinda creepy. . . like you're throwing away kittens or something Avatar: 100% ------ WOW it's ...

A chick had just finished shopping. She bought: 1 potato, 1 tomato, 1 salad bag, 1 toothbrush, 1 clove of garlic, 1 blanket, 1 ice cream, 1 apple, 1 pear, ...

2/10. . . . join what revolution? I mean, I like things that spin around, but joining something I don't even know about? *shakes head*

banned for thinking that you had no good reason to ban someone and doing it anyway

------ Ok, here I bring everyone together - maybe the story will make more sense then. ------- The Innkeeper scratched his head, his inn had never been more full. At ...

WRITERCHICK13 says: "3- I was thinking Rask and I would end up with the other group, stealing the stuff again, but I'm not sure. My other thought was we could ...