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I huddled in my bed, waiting. The sheets were drawn up over my head, and my halting breath quickly made the small enclosed space stifling. I listened, desperately tried to ...

I could find hardly anything wrong with this. I disliked the beginning - it didn't seem necessary, in fact, it was quite confusing :P But the following - loved it. ...

Hey, I didn't like the flash back. To be honest, I just skimmed through it, not really reading it. I wanted to read more about the wolf in the woods, ...

Firstly - I want to read more. Second, below are my thoughts. ------------ Crash after crash; swooping in to take its prey of sand out to sea **(this sentence confused ...

Hey, liked your story. It had a nice sweet ending. I really was skeptical at the start - I didn't like the way it was written, and I really wasn't ...

Hi :) First off, decent story. I've read plenty of stories that don't use grammar or correct punctuation, so kudos to you. I hope what I've written below will help ...

Switching between first and third person doesn't work. Here's an example of what it sounds like: Jenny smiled at Mat. I smiled at Mat. "How're you going, Jenny?" The boy ...

It's a bunny!

I'm actually surprised at how much we write alike. I swear to you that I wrote this two years ago, when I was 16 (it's quite obvious that this is ...

I actually read this a long time ago, but didn't critique it. ----------------- You crouch down behind bushes, behind bramble, behind undergrowth (was I behind anything else? Perhaps leaves, twigs ...

It was in the walls. Sometimes she could hear rounds of short abrupt movements; scuffling and scurrying, dragging and scraping. Sounds that made her skin pimple with goosebumps and her ...

Meanwhile in Amsterdam, Johnny Knoxville got high, rode his motorbike into the Gay Pride parade, and successfully assassinated Ford Prefect. . .

Chapter One Status: Reconnection Made Patch sat down to his computer. The message sat dully on his screen. From: Patch To: Jai Subject: Hey Jai. . . Date: 01 Aug ...

*pulls face* You should edit this =p Before someone attacks you for being sloppy. I mean, you've had so many helpful reviews so far, and you haven't yet taken the ...

"In fact, I'm pretty sure I would be spreading more of the same rumours, just for spite. At my school, no one bothers to make rumours about people that aren't ...