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Wait wait wait wait. You're thirteen years old?! Are you kidding me?! Kid, the quality of this story is beyond that of someone five years older than you! I was ...

Firstly, this post is WAY too long. Cut it down to at most a third. People don't want to be bogged down in a person's story for longer than 10 ...

Hi :) You critiqued my work, so here I am returning the favour. I tend to critique while reading, so I don't forget anything and tell you my on going ...

Miniauthor, I didn't actually realize how many times I used the word smell, and you're right, I can simply reduce it thus: "From the kitchen behind the bar came some ...

Roon. It's American spelling - travelling vs traveling, harbour vs harbor, colour vs color. But that's okay, I don't expect you to realize that (realize vs realise). As orc is ...

[Edited as per Roon's suggestions] Festival time. The time of the year that everyone from nearby villages come to the city of Quay to celebrate and take advantage of the ...

Hi :) Awesome idea. It reminded me of the Golden Compass, Narnia and the Secret Garden, mixed with a sort of Harry Potter-kids-being-sorted kind of thing, what with the portal, ...

I'm so sorry. It's just so long! I tried to read the majority of it - but only got up to the part where you are describing the bookshelf in ...

Hi I looked at this once before, and couldn't make myself read it. Perhaps it is just not something I would normally read. However, as no one else has critiqued ...

Hey, Firstly. . . Loved the idea! But hell! I was disappointed by the ending! So many threads left untied, so many questions left unanswered! What was the note?! Who ...

Hey :) Kylan was a bit cruel. While I do agree with him that the story is confusing and upon reaching the end I felt as if I hadn't actually ...

Hi again! Firstly - I scanned the story, and to my absolute astonishment, it's absolutely improved 100% from the first post. Well done, FireFox! Second, I see Master Yoda gave ...

If you don't want people to see this story, simply " hide" it to other viewers.

Epic ending.

Blink pretty much covered everything, but here are the corrections if you had bothered to take his advice, showing you what would have been fixed, and how it'd look. I ...