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Perhaps no one is reviewing you, Rock, because you yourself have 0 reviews to your name. Welcome to Young Writers Society. I believe that the rules indicate that you should ...

Hi WolfPaws. First of all, I think your display picture is exactly the same as SylverDawn's, which is a bit eerie. Secondly, it's 3:22am here in Australia at the moment, ...

Herro, comments in red, repetition in green (if there are any): A cat. There it sat. Or rather should I say, there it lay. (Is it bad to admit that ...

I understand that you are new to this site, Tianna, but it's not hard to Edit Your Post to delete the poem yourself. I've also noticed that you haven't made ...

zomg, Rohan :3 I must critique your work now :P Comments in red, repetition in green. There was something beautiful about the night. Though it was no stronger than a ...

Just wow. What a cool idea. Mind. Blown. :P I like your style of writing and because it is from Bailey's point of view, it's okay to be a bit ...

I'm so glad I was brave enough to read something from the Romance section of YWS after my past traumatic experiences in this category. What a fantastic, smile-filled, light-hearted beginnings ...

lol hey again. So, I get the feeling that you're a bit "dissastisfied" and "disgusted" by life, huh? :) I'm glad that though this started off fairly scientific, you deviated ...

While it might be the case that you actually intend for the writing to be styled like that, I can't help but think you write all your work using Notepad ...

As a YWSer is wont to do, I read the comments before I read the piece. So here I go :) Comments in red, repetitions in green, overall opinion at ...

You should end on this: "They don’t know what civilization is, they are animals. I’ll kill every last one of them." Creates suspense :) Also, I didn't like the escape ...

This has to be one of the best stories I've read today :) Well done on keeping me hooked the whole way through. While I do agree that the beginning ...

Well, here's my critique. Comments in red, repitition in green. Also, because you've said you don't know where to place paragraphs, I've done that for you below. As a general ...

Hey. I generally comment as I read, so if some of my comments cancel each other out. . . well yeah. Comments in red, repetition in green. Onwards. The Heavy ...

Hey :) Comments in red. CHAPTER ONE I dreamt of floating in space for so long, I forgot I had a body and a name. I forgot I had an ...