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Maybe I'm not looking in the right place, or I'm utterly retarded, but I don't see a Review Checklist anywhere on my screen when I post a reply :/ Sorry ...

Hey Girl :) Just read over it again. I'm glad you took in my suggestions. I found one thing that didn't sound right, Sam was mad, I knew because his ...

Wait, really? No one posted? :O

Hey :) Comments in red, repetition in green. * My home is a playground for the unstable [Awesome opening] . My father paces back and forth, as he waits for ...

Hey :) You have two really good reviews so far, but I'll add my own thoughts too. Comments in red, repetition, if there is any, in green. The Fate of ...

Hey, first off, I suggest removing that random post you have straight after your story: thanks for reading people of the YWS this is just sort of a pilot you ...

Sorry Nate, I should have checked for this first. Anyway guys, what do you think of this? I believe maybe points shouldn't have anything to do with it (in a ...

Hey again Firestarter, sorry for the late reply - was busy with physics homework. I get that, but right now it feels a bit like an extended info dump. Without ...

Fantastic guideline. Bookmarked, as I can see it being very useful in the near future. I found one mistake that I could remember :P 4. Consider your mood, whether it ...

brassnbridle: You could replace the archers with crossbowmen if you feel like it, just know that, while crossbows are easier to learn, they have a significantly shorter range than one ...

Hey Brass :) You critiqued Battle for me, so I thought I would return the favour :] As it so happens, I don't generally read fanfiction, but due to a ...

Kiwisatsuma: Well, you could have someone who dies in the battle. But I see what you mean about wanting to avoid bias and the only way I can think of ...

Hey Skins, I changed my mind. Would you please review the beginning of a novel my sister and I are writing for me? Everything is pretty much explained after the ...

I think this might work better if you had a colon instead of a semi-colon, because 'the effective meat shield' sort of sums up what you're describing in the first ...

Hey NinjaCookieMonster, thank you for the review. some barely of age I knew it sounded repetitive, but I couldn't think of a way to fix it. Realizing that he had ...