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Re: Mary Sue Therapy
This was fantastic :P I loved Bella's speech, but I wish Ebony's had been better. I mean, with fanfiction like that, you could have completely ripped on Tara's writing - ...
Sep 19, 2010 -
Re: Someday, It Will Rain
Hi Horseradish :) I'm Jai. “John?” he whispered sadly, as if moaning only to the mellowed wind. Hmm. Can a wind be mellow? Can a whisper be like a moan? ...
Sep 19, 2010 -
Re: [September Contest] SNAFU
Plot Generated: Your story is about a soldier at the bottom of the ocean kicking someone in the face. Word Count: 934 ----------------------------- "Our Search and Attack Unit has been ...
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: Dear YWS
Seems like YWS gets around ;)
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: The Pink Pill.
I'm in my first year of university. I didn't say my review was better than yours, I said that my review would hold more ground than that of friends crying ...
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: Saphira [unfinished piece]
I've decided to type and eat, so here I am, reviewing Chapter One. Something that I forgot to ask earlier - how did Ayra know that Saphira was with the ...
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: Saphira [unfinished piece]
Hi Fantasy. Welcome to YWS. First, when you look at wall of text like that, what do you feel? I know what I feel - intimidated. To eradicate this feeling ...
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: [September Contest] Coconuts
Hey :) You've had some awesome reviews on this already, but I couldn't help but drop by and leave my comments. “Where are you, coconut? I know I've found you ...
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: The Pink Pill.
Hi BornToShop. So, I noticed you had a few loud problems with my review. I address them here. I am also going to just quickly review it as well, because ...
Sep 18, 2010 -
Re: [September Contest] It's What I Do
Wow, this was a huge change. It was definitely more descriptive and it has very much improved. The only thing I could find on my first run through was this: ...
Sep 17, 2010 -
Re: Drowning In Sorrow.
Hey Georgie :) I have to say, this looks like a very personal piece, and I don't know how well this would be received on YWS. Fiction/prose like this is ...
Sep 17, 2010 -
Re: Sand in a Bottle (Edited Part One of Chapter One - Katie)
Hey :) I'm Jai and I hope you find my review helpful. By age seven, I could recite every single detail of it. The starting was absolutely perfect, I could ...
Sep 17, 2010 -
Re: [September Contest] The Waiting Room
Hey :P I waited a while for someone else to review this and leave a fantastically helpful review, but it didn't happen, so you're stuck with my review which is ...
Sep 17, 2010 -
Re: ~ Reviews from the Dynamic Duo ~
Done, Apple (well, I've reviewed, we're still waiting on Patch, Azrael and Dexterra to catch up). Blue Jay by Apple Under review. 1/4 Musketeers have reviewed so far.
Sep 17, 2010 -
Re: Blue Jay {Part One of Three}
Hi, Jai here, one of the Four Musketeers, upon your request at our WRFF thread. First, I suggest hiding in a spoiler at the bottom of your post your author's ...
Sep 17, 2010
