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The word Navita's looking for is a Nesting Doll (or Matroshka in Russian). In my opinion, you should steal this idea of a metaphor and run with it. Start afresh ...

From the very beginning to the very end you give us some controversy which is great. However your approach is a bit weak. Let's see. First off, accusing eyes would ...

I haven't read this from the beginning so I'm a bit confused as to what's happening. In other news, I'm pretty impressed at how detailed your descriptions of the cinematography ...

First off, don't tell us the poem sucked. Let us get a chance to make our own judgements -and I'm sure ours aren't as harsh as yours. With that said, ...

Agreed with Elinor. I want to see more of the ship. More of the tea. What kinds of tea are there? Can you make up your own? I think these ...

Oh no! I must say, I didn't see that little twist coming. (Perhaps I wasn't looking hard enough?) Anyway, you have a nice start of something longer here I think. ...

Let's see. To start, I like some descriptions you have here of the sofas, the pound cake, the lemonade etc. Sometimes you stray from these descriptions though, and the poem ...

I definitely agree with Fire - this piece can't stand alone as just dialogue! All dialogue...well most dialogue...must be accompanied by some descriptions, otherwise it's not nearly as interesting to ...

If we're going to write about unicorn poop, we may as well make it extremely interesting. I know this poem relies entirely on the form, but perhaps you'll have to ...

Why? Because writing is habitual and if you want to get good at it, you must do it even when you don't particularly want to. In my opinion, it's more ...

I'm super impressed by some of these descriptions. The place you speak of is indeed beautiful, but that's not all. I get calm. So calm that something a simple as ...

I think this poem would be much more interesting if you were more confident in the why. By that I mean take out the maybe and perhaps and instead tell ...

I would be much more impressed with this poem if you took out all of the obvious and hid it underneathe something...well...less obvious. For example you say, "she feels the ...

I am a fan of haiku. However, I always find it easier to write a haiku than to write about one. But I'll give it a try. You're writing about ...

These photographs are glorious! I especially like the second. The contrast in colors between the sky and the reflections are so appropriate and consuming. I am totally drawn in to ...