scribblingquill

i love this. Its beautiful. I havent read the others.

brilliant. truthful, honest, and simple without being clumsy. Well done. i kind of love this.

I love your writing style. Straight, to the point, but still elegant. A breath of fresh air from thirteen years olds writing about feelings they've never had with words as ...

l love this heart beat on the insides of your wrists. You are alive and delicate and insecure and I love you I have a couple of ideas of what ...

you did ^_^ though it has to be a rhyming couplet, not a last verse. but yes! thank you! ^^

=D *takes advantage of snazzy offer* I will have a look at your stuff ^^ I'd really like some good crit on my recent poetry, choose from: Like Stars This ...

language is a bit clumsy at points, but very nice ending, good twist. Work on it and it could be brilliant.

her heart doesn't beat, hence no pounding. but cute ^^

damn good boy well done

this seems like a This Poem Is Me type poem? About the different aspects of yourself. Its a nice piece definitely, i have one myself about growing up that this ...

lullaby shore thats brilliant i think some of the rest seems slightly irrelevant. To make it more focused, you could continue with this idea of the lullaby shore as childhood, ...

feet ARE small children!! :O

hmm potential basic idea not bad, i like the "her name is Girlfriend" part- like Husband from Peter Pan no? you could say that was a comment on innocence and ...

I like the way you didn't use full rhyme, it was much more subtle. I like the "fading limelight" part, and I think i understand your point but I'd try ...

the rhymes are too forced. its obvious you would not be talking about kittens if you didn't have to rhyme. Romantic? fantastic? I found it a bit shallow, and didn't ...