scribblingquill

There isn't much more to add. I didn't want this to be a long poem. If you look carefully, and think about each line then it should make sense. If ...

i LIKE that your stuff grosses me out. (im generally easily grossed out, i don't like ugly slang words etc, probably from being the daughter of an english teacher) but ...

only thing i can pick out is here: on a different occasion tiring to have a full on make out session with her at one of the burb boys "trying" ...

fuck trying to tone it down, DON'T tone it down its brilliant. take out all the sex, add more plot and make it less blunt and you've got a shitty ...

I just called you selfish Wholly unbroken but absorbing patience. I hurl hoarse blames and cries that had staled since we’d begun. Backbreak effort in trying to stay scarlet and ...

unless you want a rhyme scheme to have a specific purpose in your poem it doesnt need to have one at all, most poems don't rhyme and i think its ...

nice! The informal language threw me off a bit at times, but it definitly matches the subject matter so its all fine with me. I'd love to hear the rhythm ...

there are some nice lines in here, and the idea/concept is good too but i think you're restricting yourself with such a strict rhyme scheme. Unless you are using the ...

This is lovely. I'm afraid I'm too lazy to crit much, but there isn't much to change, its pretty much great the way it is. Very nice last line, and ...

I love you sometimes.

Yeah this is kind of stuffed to the brim with different stuff because i didn't have a specific topic while writing it, just really everything that was happening to me ...

Turn of phrase saved me, just. I do not vomit, phobia clots my mouth. I can lie, you know, I know I never told you that. My teeth shatter when ...

He opened it really carefully, like he always does. Unwrapped it rather than ripped it, even managed to keep the fragile paper bow in one piece. That another contrast of ...

Love, hate, happiness: these are all abstract concepts. Many, maybe all, poems are, deep down, about emotions and other abstractions, but it's hard to build a strong poem using only ...

This has way too much rhyme in it, and seems pretty shallow. You are just saying what you mean in a rhyming format as opposed to SHOWING themes and thoughts ...