scribblingquill

I want my fingers knotted, and Skimming ungrazed bones. Longing is too much for me, but I drag it unthinkingly out. I feel my lips tighten with drought, of Curves ...

i understand this is long, and the structure gets a bit repetitive. Obviously its more interesting to me, as i can see how it relates to me and my life ...

This is nice, simple. I think maybe the "this is me" is repeated too many times for how much is in between them. Perhaps you could put them at the ...

this is too short to be really original, and is a very used idea. anguish and heartbreak = been done to death. im breaking out the tough love on you, ...

the last lines of speech are brilliant and powerful, and i love how its tied in with the lady Luck part earlier on, it really adds a lot more meaning ...

"i don't understand Who i am yet i know Everything about me" those lines really stood out to me as relatable and meaningful, however i'd say the rest of it ...

i agree that the first few stanzas while they're definitely not bad at all (and you get some real bad stuff on here. really) the last stanza is far better ...

Obviously you've put a lot of thought into what your poem means, and i think the things you are trying to convey are very interesting, but i think the whole ...

you made a really good flowing poem and effortless rhyme structure out of a very simple, and i'd say quite boring topic. Well done. I'd like to see something you'd ...

I do agree it gets quite disorganized especially in the second half. i think the first half is good, but there are definitly too many questions all in one go. ...

younger pupils in my school were asked to write a poem about themselves called "this Poem Is Me". Seeing the results, i found it interesting and wrote one myself. If ...

i wondered why your poems are in brackets. well i say wonderED. but i still am. O.o

:D i likey the star-lit city part is a great image, and i like the general concept, just one thing. I thought you could probably change the "continuing the Never-ending ...

simple, but surprisingly not cliche or boring. i tire of first time writer's clumsy words. these were a nice change :)

i have no idea what i think of the style of this poem, and the language really. I didn't hate it, but i didn't love it, however the concept is ...