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“Jynara. Jynara. Jynara,” strange words flowed through my head. -- instead say the same strange word repeated over and over in my head. I opened my eyes and saw a ...

But at that moment, Aedomir flinched, as he saw suddenly an explosion of light, as if dawn had broken with mighty fury. Begin the sentence with suddenly, an explosion of ...

Hey everyone! Thanks for all the feedback. So I rewrote it and I was wondering if you all think it's anybetter, still needs work, or isn't quite there just yet. ...

There was a tugging and a grunt as the laces of Suzanna’s corset were tightened. Specify who is tugging and who is grunting. And tugging usually isn't a sound so ...

The clock strikes 3:00 in the mourning and Alastrona awoke. She could hear the snores and cries of other patients, with the laughter of the doctors and nurses working the ...

It began on a gray, cloudy day in late October. A cold, ghostly wind swept the fallen leafs across the rocky landscape. It was about 11 in the morning and ...

Eric was there, waving to me from the driver’s seat of his SSC Aero TT—way cooler than the dinky Porsche by it . -- i think you mean next to ...

On Monday morning, I woke up in a hole. I am farmiliar with the hole. It happened sometimes. I could always tell as soon as my eyes opened. - Good ...

I rubbed my eyes, still half-asleep from the long car ride. It felt as if home was ages away. -- ages away has to do with time. instead say thousands ...

I set down the pack and sighed. My eyes had started to hurt again. They had been bothering me more and more, those days. -- these days not those days ...

Peter lay belly-down on his dragon’s back, slowly stroking the leathery neck. It wouldn’t be too long now -- Peter lay flat on his dragon's back To them, the dragon ...

I almost don’t have a reason to, but for the fact that the world is spinning without me. -- Wow, I have no idea what you are trying to say ...

Hansel sighed and held back helpless tears instead say and tried to hold back helpless teares, “It was bound to happen; the stones worked all too well last time.” -- ...

Thanks everyone! I'll definitley switch the ending (great idea gryphonfledgling!) I like that kind of ending better. I probably will continue it but it has to be short so I'll ...

It turned out that the base wasn’t too far away. The two soldiers marched Leo at gunpoint for a little over ten minutes before they arrived at their destination. On ...