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Re: Speechless
Hey Everyone, this is my entry to Vernon's Bed contest. In the story we must personify a bed so here's my story. Critisism is much appreciated! Speechless I still remember ...
Jun 8, 2008 -
Re: Untitled as of Yet
Hi Bueberry! Welcome to YWS! Anyway here's my review key: Red = Comments bold = Words that I've inserted that might work better. Let's do this thing! Lynn went [s]was[/s] ...
Jun 8, 2008 -
Re: Nevermind
Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Words/phrases/lines that I've inserted to make it sound better. Let's do this thing! I feel bad for posting this story so ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: Gerrymandering (2)
Hey Sam! Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = words/phrases/sentense that I've inserted that I think sound better. Let's get this party started! Glossary of Nebraskan terms at ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: ~Michelangelo's Night and Day~Chapter Six
Hey ashleylee! Decided to give your piece a read through :-) Anyway, here goes the review key: Red = Comments Bold = sentences/words/punctuation and stuff that I inserted. Let's do ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: In the shadow of a star - chapter one
hey Kris! Welcome to YWS! Anyway here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Words/lines/phrases that I've inserted that I think work better. At times they're not perfect so ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: Fire the Catapults Prologue
Hey Mathlete! I'm Scasha! Welcome! Anyway, here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Words/phrases/sentences that I inserted that I think would work better. Let's get this party started! ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: The Duty, Chapter 4 {Being Edited}
MAJOR EDITS! WILL BE UP SOON!
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: Malboukia *Part II*
Hey again Dustfinger! Here's my review key once more: Red = comments Bold = Words/sentences/phrases that I have inserted that I think could work better. Here we go! ...He was ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: Catching Casey
Okay, same review key as last time: Red = comments Bold = words/sentences/phrases that I think you should add Let's see how you did. As the mind-numbing blackness of the ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: Milboukia *Part I*
Hey Dustfinger! Sorry if I repeat the stuff the person below me said. Anyway my key: red = comments bold = words I think could work better :-) Let's review: ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: Catching Casey
Hey Yelhsa211! Welcome! I'm scasha! Anyway here's my review key red = comments bold = words/lines/sentences I think could work better. Let's get this party started! As the mind-numbing blackness ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: Depression?
Hey wwjnd! Welcome! anyways here is my review key: Red = comments bold = words/phrases/lines I think would work better! Let's get this started! Hemmingway, Woolf, Tolstoy, Dickens, Poe, Vonnegut. ...
Jun 4, 2008 -
Re: Chapter 4 of Chasing The Sun
Wow! Great job! I'm not very good at critiquing romances but here a just a few quick suggestions: 1) the ending seemed a little too abrupt with the whole I'm ...
Jun 4, 2008 -
Re: Dreaming
Hey OverEasy! Here's my review red = comments bold = words I think would work better Let's do this thing! I am standing on a beach, where instead of sand ...
Jun 4, 2008