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Well, there is a world of difference between "describing more" and saying "he was 5 feet 10.6 inches tall, with auburn hair parted in the middle and his left hand ...

Thanks, folks, for taking the time to write! Here are some notes for you and future readers: 1) huddelump. There are a couple interesting theories on the origin of the ...

Isaac: Thanks! Smaur: You are completely valid on all your points. I'll take all of it to heart. Thanks for taking the time to write!

Firestarter: I know, right? I read that same mountain-sheet poem earlier today and went, "curses!" And for some reason, nightdresses and moths seem like they go together well, but I ...

Valteria: ...Sheesh. :) Thanks! I'd use the blush emoticon, but I can't think of the syntax. Actually, this was originally a screenplay I wrote in school and my instructor passed ...

Abigail: Thank you very much for reminding me and keeping me out of trouble! I plumb forgot. My apologies. Viviel: Thanks a lot! As for your comment, I can very ...

Thanks for the comment, Jasmine! I suppose the show-offy-ness of a vocabulary depends on the person cos I use scraggly and algae and perforate (even frozen tv dinners use it: ...

Well, you made some cosmetic changes, which is good. But there still exist the problems: 1) Conflict isn't compelling. It's brief and settled by: "Give me the money." "What?" "Give ...

Ahoy! So far the weather's not too terrible. It's been "raining" (read: "misting"). Anyway there's too much going on to care. I know you like the 'behind the scenes' to ...

Reporting from a hotel in India before breakfast is ready: Navita: if it weren't for the "wonderfully," I'd be nervous about the impending "long review." XD maybe I should still ...

Okay, I've decided to say more again now that I have a little more time (when, really, I should be going to bed because I've got a lot of packing ...

Your first qoute is my refernce to our heart. No, not the blood pumping heart, but our love heart. It was about how when we fall for something that doesnt ...

Dialogue is not the only reason to make a new paragraph. Please split up your first and last gigantic blocks of text because it is very unreadable without that. Seriously, ...