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Ha HA! Fantastic. It's so wild yet so dark, it's like Grimm's Sci-Fi Fairy Tales. anything is possible with enough time and resources. Then he invented his Matter Converter, and ...

The descriptions are good and thorough, but it often feels like you're describing the same thing or the same kinds of actions, that it begins to feel redundant and like ...

Until I met her I was the kind of guy to roll down his window and start yelling at the other drivers for not driving the way I wanted them ...

May I give an "in-summary" review instead of 10 little ones? 1) Use contractions more. It's really jarring when they're intense or panicking and they say, "We will do this" ...

First: Dialogue punctuation. Check out this website. It pretty much contains everything you need to know about punctuating dialogue properly. Go back through and find any and all instances like: ...

Pretty goood. Pretty good. *clicks follow* Some general comments. 1) I know it might be because we only know as much as the main character, but I just feel like ...

Just going to give my overall thoughts and impressions, because line-by-line, the story arc is good. I do enjoy the ending very much, how their grudge manifests into wrestling over ...

A rather interesting piece. Here's what I took away from it: The girl is afraid of being let down. That feeling that comes after the momentary climax where it's all ...

Agreed with confetti. The first line gives the false allure of a hook, but then there's nothing to substantiate it and then we're just watching someone cook and read the ...

An interesting premise, but something feels off about it. The words you use don't quite evoke helplessness. With my shaking hand I picked up hers and felt for a pulse. ...

The beginning was great. You really capture the whole "uneasy, what the heck is he doing, aaagh the things he says are super weeeird!" Something else I hadn’t noticed before, ...

Hilarious! Some comments: -Not entirely sure if you're effectively "challenging gender roles." I know the voice doesn't necessarily lend itself to thought-provoking analysis and questions that stick i

Banned for contributing to the suddenly ridiculous number of Notifications at the top of my screen.

The Apple From The Tree I think what lends to the confusion is some of the sacrifices made to squash it into 150 words. For example: She was the old ...

Spam reviews can come in many shapes and sizes. Sometimes, the reviewer simply quotes the entire work then either adds nothing or adds only a little bit. Other times, the ...