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I'm not in the most favorable time zone, I imagine. My window was 8pm Saturday night to 8pm Sunday night. So between going out on Saturday and dinner at the ...

They would say 70% chance. A seventy percent chance that the grass would turn a little greener, the cicadas would let the thunder speak louder, that the old nimbus of ...

Isaac: Thanks! Smaur: You are completely valid on all your points. I'll take all of it to heart. Thanks for taking the time to write!

Aye aye! But of course, everyone did great. All of our collective straws destroyed that camel's back! Congrats all!

Write us a story, or regale us with images, or explore and plumb the depths of emotions. That's what good poetry is about. Here, you have just taken a lot ...

Well, like awful fury, this piece is just exploding in any direction without a clear message. It's like watching a nouveau art film that just focuses on a million different ...

Firestarter: I know, right? I read that same mountain-sheet poem earlier today and went, "curses!" And for some reason, nightdresses and moths seem like they go together well, but I ...

I agree, the second stanza is all actual descriptions that don't lend to the power of the theme. What do the immortal paintings care if there were Hispanic men in ...

Overall, it was a fairly interesting read. But there is potential for you to drive in the point deeper. We spend 3/5 of the story going, "Okay, she's leaving. Why? ...

Holy crap, can we have anymore capital T's at the beginning of verses? There are way too many capital T's at the beginning of verses. Part of the appeal of ...

Now one needs to be careful to be writing poetry in the immediate aftermath of tragedy. You barrel in headfirst with the emotion that you feel like you're packing into ...

Valteria: ...Sheesh. :) Thanks! I'd use the blush emoticon, but I can't think of the syntax. Actually, this was originally a screenplay I wrote in school and my instructor passed ...

Abigail: Thank you very much for reminding me and keeping me out of trouble! I plumb forgot. My apologies. Viviel: Thanks a lot! As for your comment, I can very ...

Ahaha, love it. I'm waiting for my food to cook, so I had nothing else to do but decode morse code. And now I'm actually familiar with a few of ...

Well written. I enjoyed it very much. Your tone is appropriate and your descriptions are spot-on. Now for the flip side: Your paragraphs are very dense and difficult to navigate. ...