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#23 made me chuckle. Edit: Ugh, we need another punctuation mark somewhere between a period and an exclamation point. Whatever it is, that's the one I would use above.

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MMM: It's all downhill from there ;) Thanks, though! 16. SHEESH! "To be determined." Happy now? (Actually, that's not a half-bad title...) (Just for that, I'm going to write the ...

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See "Alice II" for critiques. The same ones there apply here. Lack of emotional depth, cliche character with cliche emotions. How does love affect people? Outside of Hallmark cards and ...

Umm.... A Short Story - Nike You weren't kidding. Was there somewhere you were going with this? I guess I'll critique what you have here. Alice grew up in a ...

Pretty interesting. A well-told story, but not nearly imaginative enough for the year 3026. I must echo what Tenyo has said. The year 3026 is 1,015 years from now. That's ...

... But you've had a review from Azila... Wow, you must have some high expectations. Azilas Azila's review wasn't helpful because I had already heard what she pointed out, and ...