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This is the strangest story I've ever read. So basic story goes like this: Maryann is paranoid. She beats up her vacuum. An old homeless man grabs and holds onto ...

Cute story. Is this a thing, though? Reading such downer poems to toddlers? Reading poems to them that say, "You're young now, but you're sure as heck gonna die!" "Who ...

I must concur. You tried to beat us over the head by telling us "Love Claire! Love Claire!" but all you did was just tell us "she brightened rooms" and ...

Well, you ask us not to mess with the storyline, but so far there's nothing to even hint with the storyline might be. The prologue definitely does a decent job ...

I can only echo everything that lilymoore said. All of those comments are high quality. Especially the one where you don't really tell us what Martha is to the Elisa. ...

A decent start. A few general comments. You have a trouble with over-describing things. We don't need to know exactly what your characters look like. We don't need to know ...

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It's such a strange thing that it deserves volumes written about it. It's masculine to grow hair, but it's inappropriate to leave it there? Metaphysical self-castration? The things one can ...

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