sarahk1771

I really do like this but just a few changes could be made :/ School. Oh joy. It’s really sad, actually. My school, like I said earlier, is small. Super ...

Whao you blew my mind! This is amazing, I don't think i would change anything. :) My thoughts continued to stray away from their intended track You could change it ...

You did really well in this, I like the idea and you should continue. You do need to set a plot it would make it easier to write :) Don't ...

Walking to Tec seemed longer today, was it because I was thinking of him? His liquid purple and blue eyes, his shaggy fair hair, just thinking of him gave me ...

Amazing, Grammar wasn't up to scratch, i didn't quite understand what's going on. You could try and describe what she is fellings, (The adrenalin was coursing threw my vains.) Just ...

I'm not an expert but it is really good in my opinon. You could go back and change around some sentences. Take your time, pre read. It is really good ...

Really good, interesting choice of words. The pencil at the start is a tiny bit confussing, only did i realise that a hand was involved when i read on. :) ...

Really good, interesting choice of words. The pencil at the start is a tiny bit confussing, only did i realise that a hand was involved when i read on. :) ...

Really good, interesting choice of words. The pencil at the start is a tiny bit confussing, only did i realise that a hand was involved when i read on. :) ...

I really like this. You could maybe describe how she was feeling as her sister was calling her, You made a mistake. (that maybe her sister was trying to talk ...

Walking to technology seemed longer today, was it because I was thinking of him? His liquid purple and blue eyes, his shaggy fair hair, just thinking of him gave me ...