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Okay so I'm not from Africa nor do I think I have the experience to try to write such a powerful story so tell me if you would read a ...

That was a sweet story and I really liked it. I'm waiting for more so keep it up. IN my case you just made one mistake when you started talking ...

thanks for the feedback guys I really need it :D

AWWW! that was very romantic and intresting. Loved it. Dancing, loving and all that jazz... i'm into it all. There where some moments when you sorda kinda changed you're lovely ...

Okay so this is a first for me in writing science fiction. So I don't know how it will turn out.... I'll just right the beginning and if you guys ...

There where many spelling mistakes and I got a little confused when you would suddenly skip to another scene without even ending the last one. I liked how you made ...

Hey good job Derek but there was a few times when you rushed the explanation of the fight or something like that. You where talking as if you where the ...

I liked it. But sometimes I think you're mind would wonder or something and it stopped the reader from feeling. But over all good job:)

Um.... I got a little bit to say... That was not what I was expecting. It was just talking and in one part you are talking as the third person ...

That was one of the best stories you have written!!! One problem i think is when you said sorer when her ankles or something hurt doesn't quite sound right. You ...

I never saw the spelling check. Hey your the best! Now that is what I call criticism! I am totally gonna take that with me to my next stories. And ...

hey thanks guys. It's just those silly spelling mistakes and when I get really exited while writing I tend to rush things but If i fix those I think I ...

Another spelling mistake story. Let me know how I did and tell the truth I like to hear what I did wrong so I can fix it. You didn't like ...

OH MY GOD THAT WAS REALY FUNNY! I love how twilight is like the EXACT opposite of what you wrote. Loved it loved it and loved it!!!!!! I like how ...

thanks and can I ask how you can put a picture as you're avatar?