sapphirewednesday

Thanks everyone, I've made those changes! I love constructive criticism! Keep it coming! Also, if you read this, would you guys check our my two other poems I've posted so ...

I really liked this poem! Poems like this take a topic that is very intense and sad, and almost made light of it by pointing out the narrators flaws. My ...

Reading through some of your work. The poetry mostly, seeing as I'm not in a story mood. This poem dragged me in and used the imagery that I needed to ...

HessicaJolt, this was a very good poem. I feel like in some areas it could be a bit more detailed, or with a bit more flow. The only way to ...

wow! i love it. i really can't suggest much else!

Her warm body, so close to mine Her bright smile, more devious The way she looks at me As she slowly creeps towards me I can see her skin through ...

I like the idea but when you use end rhyme every two lines the lines the lines should be longer. Either that or you should try to do a rhyme ...

Question about the views. Many other people's poetry has hundreds of views and mine has 3. Is this for any particular reason or does my poetry just suck? Thanks! -Sapphirewednesday

This is beautiful! :D I like the fact that you rhyme sometimes and then get off the rhyme, and I like that it's not like most poems which talk about ...

I honestly wasn't crazy about this poem. I don't like much how you speak so casually. I feel as if you're almost just talking, having a conversation. If you edit ...

I am fourteen an also just joined! I feel the same way, I'll make sure too look our for you and give you HONEST feedback! Welcome! :D Look out for ...

They do seem a bit amaturish, but this is only because it's your first time! Keep up the good work kid! With talent like that, when you really start to ...

This is absolutely beautiful! Please keep writing, I counted no flaws except the advise that, don't sacrifice expressing yourself for a rhyme.

I was walking and I was whistling and I was quite happy that day That was before I encountered destiny on Cherry Lane I saw something in the streets I'd ...

I like it in the way that it describes a very relatable feeling. However, I don't like the unnecessary punctuation and changing the lines more than necessary. Other than that ...