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They're waiting, watching theres nothing I can do I'm hopeless, powerless, and you are too. You see were all just sitting, waiting around We're all looking for what cannot be ...

Thanks very much everyone!!! AdoxagraphyAngelus, thanks for the suggestions, I've edited it accordingly!

This poem is alright. I feel like your poem could be better if you expanded upon your concept. Sometimes the hardest part about writing a poem is the idea behind ...

I didn't like it much because I don't feel like many people will be able to relate to it, myself included. Good poetry is mostly defined by what you like, ...

I like the idea behind it. I feel like over all it's a bit too long. I know what you're going through though, and in that way it is very ...

I really liked it! I like haikus because of the simplicity involved, though usually they are meant for nature. I actually have written many emotional haikus like this one, but ...

Sorry, but I really don't like this at all. It's very simple and seems like a 6 year old wrote it. I only say that because there aren't enough details ...

I refuse to be another girl, someone just for pleasure. I'm tired of you, I'll find someone new; who's love you can't measure. I feel like the rhymes here were ...

The grammar used isn't great. The detail isn't great. I'm all for short and sweet poems, as long as they're to the point. Sometimes the length you chose works, but ...

Nice! I like the imagery, though it seems to wind and spiral a bit. Then there's the rhyming which I don't understand if it's supposed to rhyme or not. I ...

I didn't like it much. It didn't flow well and seemed very rectangular. What I mean is, it seemed that instead of trying to get your point across, you were ...

Oh my goodness! This is wonderful! I love the vocabulary! I'm seeing words I've never seen and not only is it expanding my vocabulary as I look it up, but ...

Really really long. I don't know that the longest poems are the best. When they start getting that long I think it's best to wright a short story. Honestly, I ...

This is great! I was really captivated by all the imagery used in each line, then I got to the end and I was like OMG I DO THAT!!! Really ...

Short, sweet, to the point! I really liked it! The rhymes were awesome and the topic, something I really respect. Thank you for sharing!