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I like it! The thing you say sound like you've really experienced it, when you wrote it on the plane. The only thing I can say, when you said kick ...

I liked the emotion behind it, I liked the idea, I know your dad probably loved it, but it could use a lot of work. The rhymes in it are ...

Talons scratch the surface on a marble block. Something Once untouchable now contemplates the clock. Opening my mind to a concept once unseen. Possibility flies through me and sticks like ...

I have a suggestion. If a "poem" is this long, put it in short stories, because if u don't the people that want to read poems won't review it, and ...

I dont understand, shells are used for protection, and if your soul shattered that many times, then it wouldn't have protection. That's the only part I found to be wrong. ...

That was so sad, and unexpected. And if that was real........ im really sorry for your loss. Really great, really passionfilled thank you sooooooo much for sharing. :)

I quite liked this! I love the whole elfin thing, it's cute. Though it lacks detail and small things like that. Other than that, eveything has been mentioned. :)

thanks guys! the feedback is great!

Tranquility, peace, clarity. I find inside my soul. Whenever I take a big breath I feel serene and whole. To think about my lungs and heart As I breath the ...

Thanks so much! That is a great suggestion and I'm adding it now! :)

Short poems are my favorite. Especially ones like this. They're short, sweet, to the point. You don't have to waist your time reading a long poem that would essentially say ...

My fantasies have become my life, That's the only way they'll ever come true. Fantasies have become my life Because all I think about is you. I think about how ...

I didn't really like this poem, seeing as it seemed less like a poem to me, and more of a rant. If maybe it rhymed, or flowed smoother from the ...

Hands shaking Lips slightly quivering We talked. But this wasn't just a talk No. This wasn't a lets try to fix this talk. This was a 'Can we talk?' talk. ...

I'm the monster in the closet, Though I'm too scared to come out. I don't want to scare anyone I'm afraid they'll scream and shout. I'm the monster in the ...