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Twenty young children Sat in the bright-lit classroom, Their soft cheeks lifted high Pink and red they bloom. But poor little Rahni Sat away from all the rest, Her blue ...

Hear that? That is the sound Of my heart trying to beat, But it’s too shattered; broken The sky fallen below my feet. Rain follows my every step As I ...

What a beautiful peom! I loved it! The only thing I would change is the second line: The more I think, the more it remains clear that I'd go through ...

There are few poems on this website that bring out such emotion as your has done for me. Sitting here reading that now has bought tears to my eyes. You ...

Did you take the first two pictures? If you did then they are really good. To show more emotion, though, I would edit them. Like make the picture black and ...

Very deep and intriguing. Some of the lines had me a bit confused while others made me think "Wow, I wish I'd thought of writing that!" The first line I'm ...

Today, like so many other days, I pleaded for my mum to let me stay home from school. Once again, my screams were left unheard. And so here I am, ...

First of all, I dont like the repitition of the words: You’ve done something different with your hair. I prepare for the worst, Second, I LOVE the line: Knowing I ...

Nice poem! A bit slow moving and short. I would recommend that you use a bit more enthusiasm and let your inspiration run wild. It looks like you've just put ...

Chapter One Everyone’s life begins, I mean really begins, at some point during their lives. My mother, for instance, said her life began the night she met my father. Dad ...

I am the enemy Why do you not see? You look at me, I look at you What is your silent plea? Your eyes a sorrowful brown Mine your matching ...

A bit bland to start with, some of the words used didn't really have any effect on me. But towards the end your writing skills began to show. I loved ...

Darkness creeps inside me As I stare at my reflection Claws, so sharp, so hungry Claiming me for their collection. Hatred boils in my heart As I slash my nimble ...

What a beautiful peom! I loved the last bit: I hope they’ll understand me I am adrift And: I touch the clouds in the sky I worry the worlds im ...

Very creative and deep. I LOVED IT. I liked the way you used words and put them together to create feeling. My favourite lines that capture me most are: For ...