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The ratio would generally go like this: Review 2 pieces of work ---------> You may submit 1 piece of work. When the site is operated like this, it works much ...

There is no rythym to this poem. I am certaintly not saying that poetry must rhyme but it should have some sort of flow to it. This is a very ...

((Continued...)) There is no way of knowing where this story will go from here. Which is excellent. If the reader knows exactly where the story will go, why would he ...

Written like a true novel! It's original, with an excellent pace. The beginning is somewhat slow and it took me some time to grunge through. I'm talking about the dream ...

The beginning of this story sets a very lonely, sad mood and for this story, that is very good. But in the beginning, I also get the impression that Damien ...

From the beginning, the descriptive words you use pull the reader in. For one example: ...blushed a deep scarlet colour... It's so much better than just saying "she blushed". Some ...

Snoink, I think the idea is great! It seems like an interesting and effective way to prewrite because you'll know how you want it to end and therefore it will ...

I am really not sure what this...NaNo WriMo thing is. I can tell you, irrelevantly, that the title of the thing is curiously strange. I'm glad to hear that this ...

Okay, I'll be real eccentric here. It is the words you used that first caught my attention, before reading it in standard form. For example; playground, candies, chocolate, tongue, burning. ...

Hahah. Okay dear, you've waited long enough. Now let's get down to business. Please know that, however close we are, I do not intend to spare your feelings. First you ...

I believe I really should address this publicly if anything is to be done about this problem. I'll be blunt. I notice there is not enough critiquing going around on ...

Heheh, 'fraid not. It's based in Surdana, a kingdom in Draken: The Ancient's Gates.

It flows much like a poem would, though it is told in a narrative form. It sounds almost like a ballad when you read it aloud to yourself, seeming to ...

It's very nice. Flows like a good poem should. I especially like the title. The title, indeed, was the thing that caught my attention. It practically begged me to read ...

Well, I've only read part 1 at this time but I do plan to continue into it because I found part 1 extremely well written and intriguing. Who would have ...