rosethorn

This is something unique I've seen here! I really like this piece. Didn't strike me as poetry the first time I went through it. It feels like the opening to ...

My dear, sweet Brooke Leighann So many times I've wished for your hand Your words were cruel but your touch was soft I’d give and I’d give but it was ...

I happened to notice that eveyone who has commented on this little piece thus far has been "male". So, with that fact in mind, I'd like to pose a question. ...

Playstation 3 most definetly. Though Zelda is bomb, it's the only reason I'll consider picking up a Wii this Christmas. Playstation 3 has the best selection of games and will, ...

You suggest that rhyme would help this poem, but how? What would a rhyming sceme offer? I think the free verse works well. If you were to purposefully change it ...

First, please rate your work for language. It would be rated "R" for the F-bomb. Otherwise, you might not win too many people's favor. Second, the title of Chapter 1 ...

Okay...the "Fuck You" part is a little lame. Not just a little, but it's really just an eye-roller. I don't know what's up with people lately and trying to put ...

Being able to relate to the subject at hand would indeed help trigger a response from the reader and would thus, make it a better poem in their eyes. But ...

Thanks guys! Just finished editing what needed to be fixed. I fought with myself to keep minimal description. Apparently it turned out well because of this. I usually spend some ...

“You’re not human, are you?” Her voice was calm, even. It only shared a hint of curiosity. I stared at her. I had no intention of answering her question. Nor ...

I liked the repetition in the poem and I think you would completely change your work if you were to take it out. Prehaps the spaces between could be filled ...

I don't like it. Just jumbled words to me. I got no response out of it and, in my opinion, poetry is dependant on the response of the reader. It's ...

This is not quite a poem but it has a few poetic elements. I did not know where else to put it so I put it here. If someone knows ...

I love the sarcasm in this poem! The message is so clear and this is the same thing, I think, that lingers in the back of our minds but we ...

I think this poem focuses far too much on the rhyming and it takes away from the meaning. It sounds rather repetetive. I don't much like it at all. Try ...