roostangarar

Once again, you're writing is great. You have a real talent for making the reader connect with the characters in the story, because I really felt sad for Lily when ...

I like it. It's strangely reminiscent of an episode of that T.V. program where the guy's Dad is the devil and he has to collect souls for him, yet at ...

Now then. I am utterly disgusted that even after all these comments, no-one has picked up on the GINORMIC flaw in this piece. It truly sets my veins afire with ...

Good god these stories are incredible. Only a few things I can think of; It seems rather too convenient that Alex's towel is lying on a rock exactly where she ...

Agreed, a great poem. However, I'm the son of a cattle farmer, so I'm going to have to point some things out. Cattle: A term used to refer to two ...

This is awesome! I really felt like I could see Envy, all angry and gnashing his/her teeth in rage. I liked how s/he subtly manipulated the nameless girl, finding the ...

Hmmm. I'm not sure what to think about this story. There aren't any punctual or spelling errors, but it all seems quite rushed. It's hard to explain, so I'll show ...

This story is truly great. I was really drawn into it and enjoyed what the protagonist's opinion was on everything. There are only two things I can think of that ...

There is no way, in any dimension of any universe, that these are being done in 15 minutes. They're better than what I can do in 4 hours! The only ...

Wow. I'm going to have to spend some time on this. There are a lot of mistakes here, especially punctuation and capitalisation on proper nouns especially. Grandpa, Dad etc should ...

This story's pretty good, there are only a few things I can pick out, and they're mostly spelling mistakes. "The sharp voice floated down the street". There isn't really anything ...

This is a really awsome piece! I got to about half-way through the third paragraph before I had to skip to the bottom to see what happened at the end. ...

Hmmm, it seems more like you're doing a military report of an event, rather than a first-person view of it. There really is no emotion whatsoever. It's like you're observing ...

I like it. I like the story as a whole, but it does need a lot of work. You have quite a few spelling errors that NSND missed but I ...

First off, I'm really getting into these stories. Secondly, you're getting a lot better. And now to jump straight in! We manage to scrounge together a camp, lighting fires from ...