roostangarar

Before I start, know that I am very harsh, and I can't help being sarcastic. Honestly, I struggled to read this. You have no trouble with grammar or spelling, but, ...

Disclaimer. The events described in this story are the views of the writer only, and are not to be taken as a definitive set of rules. "Woah woah woah!" I ...

Time for some shred ripping! "A hair salon helped people to look better by removing something old and worn out; a Memory Removal Clinic helped people to feel better by ...

Once I had devoured my breakfast, and shot out of the door before my mother could pester me about money and schoolbooks, I strode down the pavement towards my bus-stop. ...

Well. This was rather peculiar. I honestly don't know what to say to this. It's either so good that it's beyond my comprehension, or it just doesn't...something. I'll do what ...

Actually, reading over this again, I noticed that you only wrote one letter. For an entire post. What's up with that?

I really enjoyed reading this. It's short enough to enrapture the reader and keep you from losing interest, but at the same time it's long enough to perfectly capture exactly ...

Banned because you misspelled grey, and because I can catch you.

Rasp, rasp. The breeze teases my hair. It's stronger up here, where there are few tall buildings. And by that, I mean few buildings taller than the one I'm currently ...

Much better! Honestly, it's like a different person has written this, it's that much of an improvement. There are really only a few things I can pick on, and to ...

This was awsome! I really got drawn into it, and I want to read MOOAAAR!!!! You seriously have to write an entire book of this. I mean, next to nothing ...

Okay. Well, I couldn't find any grammatical or spelling errors (except for where Needew turned on his HUD and you said that some of the information 'were' redundant) so kudos, ...

It's disturbing and made me feel slightly ill, but I get the impression that thats what you were aiming for. If so, well done! Your use of description was excellent, ...

I liked it! I couldn't find anything that Priceless didn't mention that needs fixed, and I especially enjoyed how you captured what people who are like that act. It made ...

Once again, you're writing is great. You have a real talent for making the reader connect with the characters in the story, because I really felt sad for Lily when ...