retrodisco666

Sluggishly, we pull our sins towards our end. Some carry with strangled rope, digging their heels into the blistering sand. Others carry theirs as carry on luggage on their journey. ...

HI! Personally, I think darker imagery is needed. You have the emotion and the anger and frustration, and some good description but id on't think it's dark enough, I think ...

Hi! I think everything you're saying is right but maybe once or twice you need to chose a character from either text and compare them in the way they create ...

"Where can i find her?" He stumbled into the bar for the fourth time this week. "Where can I find her?" Four drinks down and he still demands her. Still ...

I can see shadows. Elongated shadows crawl the walls of my mind. My very tissue becomes staurated by the thought of them. They race through my blood stream. It circulated ...

Random red runs are scattered across my arm. Some see it as a cry of help, or for attention. I was looking for escape. You all currently have the exact ...

Hello :) First comment is if you touch stanza one I will eat you. It is perfect, especially the italics line, it has such a good punch to it, questions ...

Bonjour! I do french, but i'm not sure to what degree I am compared to you, but I noticed somethings. it is mainly the feminie and masculine agreements. Par exemple! ...

His chesnut frame is in stark comparison to the excess mud which they storm across. They are now understand the gun fire which aims for the legs, which hopes to ...

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Hello, This poem has thrown me. I love it. It is my ideal poem. I love the imagery, theme, content everything, but there is something not here. Yove made a ...

Hey! I remember reviewing this the first time around months and months ago!!!! :L Let me just say now it is in the Lyric catergory and shortened it makes a ...

Hey, This is the second piece of yours I've reviewed of yours and i've think i'm understanding your style. You write with a lot of emotion. It is jam packed ...

Hello! First I shall explain my technique, I review on content and refer to a poem as scales. The perfect poem has the perfect balance of imagery and emotion! Okay, ...

Hello! I think from your old piece it is a drastic improvement and you should be proud. However, the new version is very imagery based and very little punch is ...