retrodisco666

HEY! First thing i must say is Bravo, a hundred times over! That was beautifully written! A very good read. However, just saying that would be pointless. Numbers, planets, hand-drawn ...

I am captivated by the silent winds. They swim through our sanguine nightmares, caress your very fears and hold them with beast like grip. This is night. Night, a simple ...

Hi! I am a theatre as well as English student so I know your problem. For me, I couldn't write in iambic pentameter until I did a duologe from "A ...

"Courtney, pl-pl-please stop!" Alex blubbered. His defined cheekbones drenched in tears. His brown eyes full of tears, which spilled out continously. I looked at him feeling nothing but hatred. "Fuck ...

Hey, First off, I don't get, so please tell me :L Next I think length needs adding as i felt like i was just reading an oppening. Next emotion; there ...

Hello, that was, well, awesome! Negatives first, there aren't many. I'd condense it into fewer paragraphs as the transition lost raw emotion, but i would isolate "I heard it befor ...

Hello :) The two poems are each others flaw if that makes sense. I would say to you what your teacher said to you for the first one, yes. But ...

Ophelia; She walks clenching a knife, unto her pale and cold bosom. Her wet night gown dragging, pulling weeds behind her. Her hair mangled and dark, polluted with water. She ...

The moonlight shone down onto her pale, beautiful face. Her firm jaw framing her perfect smile. I could not love her more than I did at that point. I pushed ...

Hey, your poem intrigues me so i am giving you a large review :D Like a shadow he enters my realm, Change to semi colon my solitude Period Darkening my ...

HELLO! I enjoyed your poem and I do agree a stronger ending is needed, but i'm not sure what yet . . . maybe i'll come back to it. I ...

Hello dear :) First of, this is beautiful. imagery and emotion perfect. (Yep I don't have to use the scales XD) But that would just be pointless saying that. The ...

i know you have decided so this is futile, but had you considered writing something from a zombie p-o-v ... That would be unique. :L ~Retro Disco666

Hello, Well it's good to see i am not the only one who can write a poem about cannabilism :D The imagery you have in here is great and very ...

I sat peering from my window, to the dark, dismal moors that stretch before. The darkness it swallowed and the moonlight it followed, stalked hare and rabbit greater than before. ...