retrodisco666

errrm well it's okay, i have read worse. You have tried to hard with this poem, and if this is what you were trying to write, you should have called ...

Hello, I shall be your reviewer. Right, i shall start with the positives. It's amazing. I like your storyline and i think it could turn into an amazing novel. I ...

I really like this. I read it because of your user name. I love him. I think it needs renaming because it isn't Really catchy. But other than that. Love ...

That is amazing. The use of repetitiveness is used really well. a solid piece.

I still don't understand The knife went in but he still wouldn't die. Four nights previous I was stood their, in our kitchen. I was looking in the spice rack ...

I took a drink from a vial, so that i could sleep a while, The doctor shall pronounce me dead, so i can be with my wed. I walk towards ...

That I clawed out my very own heart for nothing That even your saline teeth itch— I think these are the two best lines in the piece. This is rather ...

Good quite good. My only point would be, is that the first stanza doesn't feel like a first stanza. It doesn't really seem to have a hook, maybe it's just ...

It's good but needs work. Like nova said it has very little written. I think you have the write concept and with a little work, could become a good love ...

Again i stand by everything i have put on my review of the first chapter. Read that and see where it takes you.

Right, the first thing i'm going to say, is that you need to work on the spelling in the piece, and you need to put and instead of n, also ...

God, help me..." she murmured. Still the sickening smell of burning flesh and the blood-curdling sound of horrified screams of pain and death assaulted her other senses, and made her ...

Personally, i feel that the theme of the poem changes throughout it. I think you stanza about the bottle and guilt is rather good, and if i was you, i ...

J.Lo's baby has three heads London bomb kills ten The order that has been written in is interesting. I think it shows how truly interested the world is about things. ...

I like most of this poem A fine layer of frost coats the world. Then, a blanket of white. As the temperature drops, Comes the fear of frostbite. I just ...