retrodisco666

I actually disagree. I love this poem. I think the repetition re-enforces everything that she has to carry, but it seems that is just me, but i wouldn't change this ...

Hello there! I shall review your poem I am riveted by the thin lines of blood that trails down your arms You scream you scream, 'God help me!' I am ...

Pure genius, I love it! My only slight thing, would be to change the wording on the last line. Maybe to something like and watch the curtain close, as for ...

Hey, I'm just gonna put some notes around the poem, and then you can PM and tell me what you think if you wish. Who can fill my empty heart? ...

A book called the left hand of god. I bought it was then like, what the hell is this on about.

Hey again. The edit has made all the difference. It now flows like a good poem. Which it is. This piece has shot up in my opinion. I now love ...

Hey, Okay i will highlight in red and give comments in black. Feeling What’s happening to me? What is this feeling raging inside my brain? Worming its way into the ...

August My doctor says I have a problem. Sends me to the special hospital. They ask me questions like "what does this mean to you?" and "how does this make ...

Hey, The thing with this is. I like everything in the poem, and think that it is really good, but i think your use of enjambment is wrong and out ...

Hey, It's good. . . but not good as a poem. I would try and expand on that last line and either make a short story or another poem, because ...

I love it. Simple as. It is pure excellent. It reminds me of Edgar Allan Poe in a poem. Well done. I can't find a fault or flaw anywhere. ~Retro ...

For me the only saving grace for this poem is this. The days became colder and so did you I love that line completely. It will have been said before, ...

If I died tommorrow, I want flowers on my grave, small white ones, that all look the same. I don't want a church service, they always made me sad, but ...

Hey, well done. You have summed something up in a stanza, which other's would have slaved over stanza after stanza to create. Truly excellent. I loved it. It feels so ...

This poem hurt my head :( The thing is the rhyme is to much, like others have said before. I only found out today what forced rhyme was as it ...